24 September, 2010

Aftereffects of Sedation

The colours faded,
and the peace gone,
an empty echo remains,
a blank space,
where once,
a throbbing town resided.
Aftereffects of sedation,
of busy dreams and quiet screams.
of fake sleep and wakeful slumber.
of visting blank spaces,
where once throbbing places existed.

8 comments:

  1. Wow....I loved this one...!!!muaah..!!

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  2. :) Thanks! I think you are the only one who understands my poetry! ;)

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  3. this is really nice actually, maybe if you work hard enough you can really write

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  4. Thanks Achuthan! I appreciate all the kind words. :P

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  5. I love the last line... where once throbbing places existed. This is really lovely, great work. I like poems that are short and to the point.

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  6. Oh wow this had an amazing impact, really really well done

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  7. very profound,
    a few lines, a job well done.

    Happy Rally.
    let us know via commenting after you made 18 comments among your peers.

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